tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post6738835576374606910..comments2024-01-09T17:48:45.910-06:00Comments on Travis Erwin: Coo, Coo Cachoo ...Travis Erwinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09420879160702098979noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-28055575033307148762007-11-20T06:29:00.000-06:002007-11-20T06:29:00.000-06:00I feel bad for your wife! I hope it all heals up f...I feel bad for your wife! I hope it all heals up fast! <BR/><BR/>Were you wearing your white tank top t-shirt under your jacket while shopping? That doesn't help.Bubblewenchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13138352865911195593noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-1386447367787528672007-11-18T05:08:00.000-06:002007-11-18T05:08:00.000-06:00Sherry - I don't think people need that shirt to w...Sherry - I don't think people need that shirt to wonder about me.<BR/><BR/>Pretzel - Thanks for the dedication.<BR/><BR/>Cher - That would require ambition.<BR/><BR/>Ello - My wife has a habit of falling or bumping her head, but thisis the first time nay serious injuries have incurred. Both of y'all need to be careful.<BR/><BR/>Alex - When you say a good shiner, I'm think of a bottle of Shiner Bock beer. <BR/><BR/>Charles - As a fellow hairy guy I'm sure you get judged as well.<BR/><BR/>Merry - You are right. No way do I wann get on those Catholic teachers bad sides.<BR/><BR/>Church Lady - Thanks for the comments and for reading. That short story is something I wrote a logn time ago, but just recently sold to Underground Voices, so i guess it is too late to rewrite it now even though I found several things I wish I could change once I read it on their website. Oh well I've already cashed the check and we writers are never completly happy with our words anyway. Thanks again for readingTravis Erwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09420879160702098979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-7739513359907839112007-11-17T19:31:00.000-06:002007-11-17T19:31:00.000-06:00Gripping. Is this part of a larger story? There's ...Gripping. Is this part of a larger story? There's a lot here. I felt as if I was there. The pacing was spot on.<BR/>Very good writing!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-56362790995350923202007-11-17T17:11:00.000-06:002007-11-17T17:11:00.000-06:00Hi Travis, If you're serious about asking for a cr...Hi Travis, If you're serious about asking for a crit, I'll offer a short one.<BR/><BR/>First off, I haven't finished reading. I wanted to catch this as my gut reaction. I think you should start with this paragraph, reordered a bit. The stuff before it, while well-written, didn't spark the way this paragraph did.<BR/><BR/>***<BR/><BR/>There are those things that made up my nightmares. Fueled my dread. The clink of ice hitting the bottom of a glass. The gurgle of whiskey being poured. The heavy thud of my father’s work boots in the hall. The sobs of my mother -- whimpers of my little brother. <BR/><BR/> As the sun set on my thirteenth birthday, I knew what I would do. Shedding the fear, I prepared to shake free of my shame and become a man. <BR/>****<BR/>After I read those two paragraphs, I'm hooked. JMHO!<BR/><BR/>Now, I'm going back for the ending.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-16948582313855788922007-11-17T15:00:00.000-06:002007-11-17T15:00:00.000-06:00Ah well, Travis, count your blessings... thank goo...Ah well, Travis, count your blessings... thank goodness it happened at work, otherwise her co-workers would hate you forever... and those Catholic School teachers are no joke... speaking as someone who's spent most of my life in the Catholic School environment... <BR/><BR/>though, if it had happened back when we were in school, I might wonder if there was a nun and a yardstick in the mix - they could be deadly.Merry Monteleonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09435956005780500310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-37162598070366546052007-11-17T12:25:00.000-06:002007-11-17T12:25:00.000-06:00Glad everyone is feeling better. That t-shirt ide...Glad everyone is feeling better. That t-shirt idea is a great one.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-40789704785714725012007-11-17T07:58:00.000-06:002007-11-17T07:58:00.000-06:00Yeah, I had the same deal once. One of the kids, w...Yeah, I had the same deal once. One of the kids, when young, bucked her head into my wife's eye so she got a good shiner. And everyone assumed I was to blame. Been there, done that, and all I got was a stinking T-shirt is all I can say.alex ketohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08003786334665677107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-849370319458389972007-11-17T00:20:00.000-06:002007-11-17T00:20:00.000-06:00Sorry about your wife but glad to hear she is not ...Sorry about your wife but glad to hear she is not going to lose any teeth! Can I tell you that I also fell (clumsy too, I guess) and scraped up my knuckles very badly. Everyone's been asking me if I've been punching my husband!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-77161489373912561392007-11-16T21:01:00.000-06:002007-11-16T21:01:00.000-06:00At the very least you must get a jiffy marker and ...At the very least you must get a jiffy marker and write that on a piece of paper and pin it to her shirt and go SOMEWHERE!!! ANYWHERE!!! or do it and take a picture and photoshop yourself everywhere.cherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13901320369144188245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-21339209185940905542007-11-16T20:43:00.000-06:002007-11-16T20:43:00.000-06:00Travis - I dedicated my last post tonight ( 3 toda...Travis - I dedicated my last post tonight ( 3 today) just to you. :) I hope it brings a smile to your face. <BR/><BR/>I hope your wife mends soon so folks won't look at you and give her hints on how to burn you in bed. <BR/><BR/>Glad to hear the wee ones are feeling better.preTzelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03536465579225240434noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9174721864572618040.post-47774471202844651772007-11-16T20:30:00.000-06:002007-11-16T20:30:00.000-06:00All right, the first paragraph had me in stitches....All right, the first paragraph had me in stitches...but I so feel for your wife!!! I can well imagine the looks you've been getting...people just automatically jump to "a" conclusion...at least she wasn't wearing a t-shirt that said "I'm with stupid"..that would really make 'em wonder!Sherryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08271529958269038071noreply@blogger.com